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HMH Murray
@nillcord.bsky.social
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Writer of space opera and fanfiction
NYC Midnight Finalist SS 2024
Futurescapes 2022
Codexian SFWA

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HMH Murray @nillcord.bsky.social · 15d
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Preorder for Navvies' Flight is live, and beta reviews are in.

"MAGNIFICENT."
"The stakes are about as high as they could be for Polla... she might be causing destruction and death... And she might be disappearing into Ledas, losing her very self..."
"DUNE"
nillcord.bsky.social
I don't know if it's me, or the watching the show while filling in copyedits, but Season Three of "The Fall..." So... They've captured a serial killer. They have him in an unguarded hospital room, and they've assigned him a nurse that looks exactly like all of his victims... And not a trap.
November 24, 2025 at 9:29 PM
nillcord.bsky.social
Have reached halfway point in copyedits, jeez this book is long.

There are points where, if I can toot my own horn, I blow myself away. There are other points that do not... Trying to deal with them.

There is a complicated thing I am trying to do in chapter 15 that is causing me fits.
November 24, 2025 at 5:29 PM
nillcord.bsky.social
Aside from misallocating my commas, this is my most common kind of typo.

I call it: the edit without the delete.

My brain just stutters and doesn't finish the process.
November 23, 2025 at 9:07 PM
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woodenvelt.bsky.social
Spencer and Wren summon a ghost.

From my romantasy wip about a priest of the dead and a thief with a heart of gold.

#WIPSnips #WriteSky #WritingPrompts #WritingCommunity #Wrencer
“Let’s get on with it then.” Spencer drained the remains of his port in one long gulp and set the glass on the table with a soft clink. “What’s the departed’s name?” “The Honorable Duke Shelton Bryce Cormier Var Dunnis, Shelly to his friends.” “Bit of a mouthful, isn’t it?” Spencer hoisted two wooden chairs lining the wall and carted them to the reading table. Wren picked up the ring and set it neatly on the black cloth-covered surface beside a folded scrap of paper. “Oh, you know how it is with nobles,” she smirked, taking a seat at the table. “The length of your name is directly proportional to your level of swank.” With a chuckle, Spencer took the chair opposite her and tugged at the corner of the silk square covering the summoning crystal. It slid free in a pale waterfall of fabric. Spreading his hands across the table, he cleared his throat and looked at Wren. She gave a nod, signaling that she was ready. Spencer laid his left hand over the ring and touched the base of the crystal with his right. Wren had seen mediums and card readers with polished crystal balls before, but Spencer used a solid chunk of six-sided quartz with spires jutting out of a rocky base. Darkening from clear at the tips to smokey gray near the bottom, the thing was nearly as large as her head. I’d need a mule and a pulley if I wanted to nick it.
November 22, 2025 at 1:19 PM
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5feetofredfury.bsky.social
#WIPSnips #WriteSky #writingprompt

Somewhere between book 3 and book 4. I'm not sure yet, but
🥰🥰🤭
Though in the privacy of their room with the guqin playing softly from afar, when Daisuke looped a necklace with a shard of rose quartz around Obito’s neck with trembling hands, then dipped his head so his partner could do the same, it only seemed right to trade at least one of the three ceremonial bows—the one meant for each other. No blessing that would never come was needed from their families, no promise that they’d never keep made to the heavens; only the truth about how they felt for one another mattered. A union, but without the baggage of marriage.
November 22, 2025 at 1:26 PM
nillcord.bsky.social
My other editing tip of the day: sex scenes.

Less is usually more. You can go wild in those early drafts... But 9/10, you probably want to cut phrases like "swollen areola" from the published version.

We will never speak of it again.
November 21, 2025 at 7:51 PM
nillcord.bsky.social
Another part of editing: noticing the "first drafty" sentences that you just kind of let fly with their many many things saying the same thing in an overly ornate way.

And trimming them on accord with the slightly less flowery of the character pov.

Or in a few cases, making them more.
November 21, 2025 at 5:41 PM
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chantal-agapiti.bsky.social
A Variety of
Indie Books for Mood readers.

Let's see where your mood takes you today.
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Thank you for supporting indie books 💙📚

#indieauthor #bookrecommendations #booklover #booknerd #bookaddict #romancebooks #fantasybooks #books #scifibooks #shopindie #booksky
November 21, 2025 at 7:51 AM
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mcburnellauthor.bsky.social
#WIPSnips 'special'

I really liked writing this friendship. They started out enemies.
The special people cleared off the instant Dyafer set about cleaning up the mess, although everyone had had a hand in making it. She felt a stir of resentfulness and went over to her friend. Rested an arm across the shorter woman’s shoulders while Mercuria issued orders to their mages. Dyafer wasn’t the only one who didn’t have miraculous powers from the ancient world; she wasn’t the only one who felt responsible for dealing with the damage; she wasn’t the only one still here, doing the unglamorous.
November 20, 2025 at 8:24 PM
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mollyjongfast.bsky.social
Live your life so you’re not the only living president and vice president not to be invited to a former vice president’s funeral
November 20, 2025 at 9:50 PM
nillcord.bsky.social
#Novmember 20
November 20, 2025 at 5:45 PM
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zohrankmamdani.bsky.social
On this Trans Day of Remembrance, we remember the bright and courageous trans people whose lives were stolen by hatred. Their absence is felt across our city.

We will honor them by building a New York where every trans person can live safely, fully and freely.
November 20, 2025 at 4:57 PM
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laurajohansen.bsky.social
That's the same rate for piecework my great-grandmother got at the Maidenform factory in Bayonne, NJ almost a century ago - that's not a current, livable wage in any place
November 20, 2025 at 12:13 AM
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simonguy.bsky.social
The Secret Commonwealth of Elves, Fauns and Fairies as Discovered by the Reverend Robert Kirk in his Various Sojourns in the Fabled Realms of Open Source.
A photo of a copy the 2007 NYRB edition of The Secret Commonwealth of Elves, Fauns and Fairies by Robert Kirk. The cover art is a detail of The Fairy Feller's Master Stroke by Richard Dadd.
November 20, 2025 at 12:39 PM
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acturek.bsky.social
#WIPSnips #fantasy #WritingCommunity #WriteSky #special

Cerel sits with Drisal and the unconscious Rushak. “ Beyerfind Rose” is wine. First speaker is Drisal.

- Brother’s Keeper, book one of my fantasy WIP about two brothers bound by a misunderstood power.
"How did this happen?" His tone was beseeching. "You've withheld so much." Cerel sat beside them, eyes averted. "I've told you all I understand. Anything more will have to come from him." Drisal nodded, arms folded, clearly unsatisfied with his answer but said nothing more. He shuddered, nearly beyond comfort. Cerel had to give him something. "We celebrated his Naming day," he offered. The day that should have been, but wasn't. Drisal looked up, interested, even smiled a little while Cerel told him the story. "Where did you get Beyerfind Rose?" "From Jer. I was saving it for a SPECIAL occasion. I judged that qualified." "Imaärta," Drisal said. "You carried it all that way! It's more than he would have received at home." Brother's Keeper A.C. Turek
November 20, 2025 at 1:02 PM
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professoremily.bsky.social
#WIPSnips #amwriting #writingcommunity #writers #writesky

More worldbuilding today! They're talking about the Growing Rooms, which are special rooms with built in grow lights. Weird but useful!

From #Tenement, my dystopian mystery about people living in an infinite building.
“That’s right, Jonathan. And how many in Exeter Neighborhood, specifically?” “Two hundred fifty-eight.” Jon took a big chomp out of a bell pepper. “We ha’ the mosh ekshept for Levish Neighborhoog. They go’ three-hungred for’y-sheven.” “Swallow before you talk please.” Mrs. Schultz grimaced. “But, yes, that’s correct. Now, who remembers what makes the Growing Rooms so different from other rooms?” “It’s becaush they—” “Someone other than Mr. Neal?” Jon sulked. The rest of us glanced awkwardly at each other. “Uh...?” Greg Bielski spoke up, bravely but foolishly. “Could you repeat the question?” She sighed. “I asked what makes the Growing Rooms so special. Anyone? Mr. Enokido?” “Why’d you pick me, Mrs. Schultz?” Kazuo asked. “Because you looked like you really wanted to be picked.” Kazuo scratched his head, mussing his black hair. “Uh, let’s see. Because, um...?” His eyes wandered toward Jon, who was trying to mouth the answer to him. Unfortunately, Jon was terrible at mouthing answers. “Because of—the lights?” he guessed blindly. “Lucky guess, Kazuo,” she said. “But that’s correct.”
November 20, 2025 at 1:20 PM
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sayaashrah.bsky.social
#WIPSnips 20. "Special"

Datusha is a very special sword :)

And Happy Trans Day of Remembrance to all my trans siblings out there: don't ever let the clowns smother our light, no matter how hard they try!

#ChroniclesOfTheRealms #SayaAshrah #WriteSky #WritingCommunity #WritingPrompts
“But how does it know you? Have you fought before?” “You could say that.” There was a hint of amusement in the sword’s reply. “You told me you’re valuable to Ulorzz because you’re its eyes in the Astral Plane, right? A plane it cannot access by itself.” “Correct.” “That wasn’t always the case. Once upon a time, Ulorzz could walk among the spirits, like all of Death’s children. Take a guess at who severed its connection.” Ashrah came to a sudden stop, her eyes wide when she looked down at the sword. “You?!” “Oh, yes! One of the most satisfying moments in my long, loooong existence! How it despises me for that! Drowned me in one of its volcanoes, too.” “And you survived?” Obviously, it had, but Ashrah could not help but be once again amazed at Datusha’s resistance to everything that would have decimated any other creature. Or sapient artefact. “Survived? Hah! I absorbed as much of the Nether energy in its Eternal Flame as I could, then sent it off with a special coat of psychic force. Exploded half of its layer and gave the bastard a headache it didn’t forget for millions of Pulses!”
November 20, 2025 at 12:38 PM
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brandyo71.bsky.social
#wipsnips
#writingcommunity
#writersofbluesky
#writesky
#booksky
#amediting
#litfic
There’s something else, Rosie says to her. I’m not sure how to say this, because I do understand your feelings about the bench. And I know you are protecting the family and, she pauses, perhaps yourself. No one wants to be constantly reminded of a tragedy like this. I get it. It’s just that something like this bench isn’t just for the Davies family, or for you. It’s for the community. When something like this happens, it doesn’t just happen to one. It happens to all. Everyone sees themselves in the family; they see their child. There needs to be an outlet for those feelings to emerge as a group. We all belong to each other. That’s what makes it so special on the hill.
November 20, 2025 at 9:57 AM
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brandyo71.bsky.social
#wipsnips
#writingcommunity
#writersofbluesky
#writesky
#booksky
#amediting
#litfic
There’s something else, Rosie says to her. I’m not sure how to say this, because I do understand your feelings about the bench. And I know you are protecting the family and, she pauses, perhaps yourself. No one wants to be constantly reminded of a tragedy like this. I get it. It’s just that something like this bench isn’t just for the Davies family, or for you. It’s for the community. When something like this happens, it doesn’t just happen to one. It happens to all. Everyone sees themselves in the family; they see their child. There needs to be an outlet for those feelings to emerge as a group. We all belong to each other. That’s what makes it so special on the hill.
November 20, 2025 at 9:56 AM
nillcord.bsky.social
The point in editing when you wonder if you should cut action. Attempted assassination? Needed or not? It makes sense to me, and it shows a Kamen skill that becomes important later...

Anyway, the highlighted text is mostly full of notes with me going ugh ugh no. Cut this sentence.
November 20, 2025 at 1:08 AM
nillcord.bsky.social
Days of editing: today's tip!

Take out most of your italicizations. They seemed important when you were *writing* .

Now they look *stupid.*
November 19, 2025 at 3:04 PM
nillcord.bsky.social
I am most assuredly the only person avidly following the evolution of the first page of Navvies' Flight's prologue, but here it is.
Prologue Mureen of Glos Fifteen Standard Months Ago, UNITY ASCENDANT, Feldelroy Orbital Ring Thanks to Admiral Vadim’s rather dubious good will, the Kamen Elders had been assigned quarters in the Ascendant’s petty officer cabins, located in the hinterlands of the octune deck below the bridge and near the dreadnaught’s stern. Since the junior Ken’ri they supervised were bunked on the opposite end of the ship—tucked into a converted maintenance corridor off the forward bow—Mureen had to pass through four checkpoints to reach her mentor's cabin. The Unity commandos assigned to those checkpoints had been expecting a lot more action on this historic mission, and being demoted to reviewing credentials in a secured hallway made their restlessness show. Mureen thought she could have learned a lot about Vadim’s plans in a few moments’ gossip with those bored soldiers, but she couldn’t spare the time. Her mentor’s summons had been the first thing she’d seen returning to her bunk that morning. A handwritten, SEE ME IMMEDIATELY tucked on her pillow, which meant Ells had traversed the entire length of the ship to find her himself. Sixteen years of his training had taught Mureen that such effort from her normally staid mentor required a quick response. “I’m sorry I wasn’t there…” she began from the door. “I spent the night in Medical.”
November 19, 2025 at 3:50 AM
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stephanierose1201.bsky.social
HI I'M AN INDIE AUTHOR, want to buy my books?

Bridgerton closed-door historical with Game of Thrones & Ever After vibes: books2read.com/u/4jxVAD

A Greek mythology horror mystery - as if Percy Jackson was written by Quentin Tarantino: books2read.com/u/4Er9P0

#booksky
Author Stephanie Rose sitting on a bench holding her 6 books up, sunlight and trees in the background
November 18, 2025 at 9:54 PM
nillcord.bsky.social
The kinds of edits in a final pass:

1. Grammar
2. Typos
3. Streamlining dialogue tags, adverbs, repetitions not yet caught.
3. Correcting new typos made doing those corrections.
4. Eliminating dialogue loops and plot holes not before cut.
5. Correcting more new typos.
November 18, 2025 at 6:46 AM
nillcord.bsky.social
Working through my edits, courtesy of the @darlingaxe.com team )

Kara and Davy, my comma lodestars in a sea of doubt.
November 17, 2025 at 9:52 PM