I only reviewed the first picture, I felt like some expression is a bit lengthy, and some has slight confusion. Also i would prefer to add a comma on some natural stops when reading the story aloud.
But overall I like how that scene is built up, and it makes me want to read further ^^~
March 17, 2024 at 11:09 AM
I only reviewed the first picture, I felt like some expression is a bit lengthy, and some has slight confusion. Also i would prefer to add a comma on some natural stops when reading the story aloud.
But overall I like how that scene is built up, and it makes me want to read further ^^~