utterly and hopelessly obsessed with the vibes

Day 2637839 and im still in awe of this book 🥺

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Ah then it might give more clarity by saying "new pantheon"!

is Three's "family's creation" referring the world or the new pantheon? The intro gives me the impression that the world matters to Three, so perhaps it will make a more compelling stake (that is, if Three cares about the world a lot and it's tied to his personal interest)

GORGEOUS

The premise looks promising 👀 The second line can be clearer. Who is sworn to kill whom? The silk maker wants to kill Alissara or is it the other way round?

Found your second attempt! Now this is so much more compelling!! I think it's quirky and perfect!

This pitch is simply *chef's kiss* (pun not intended). Apart from some small typos i think it's perfect!

Ooohh the premise is intriguing! There is a lot happening in the pitch so it might help to keep it in a simple intro + conflict + stake structure (all three should be connected)

THIS IS SO CUTE AND FUNNY I WOULD READ THE HECK OUT OF IT

Obsessed with the pitch and comps omg. Perhaps the stake part can be reworded to create more tension, focusing on how the MC and his sibs are affected?

The premise had me 👁👁
So, I think the stake (how Lucy's life is impacted) can be clearer. Love the part with "get in, get out" but the phrase raises some questions (into and out of where?). It's not a big issue but could be removed if you run out of wc—just my two cents

The art 😍

THE ART IS STUNNING