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leahbauerwrites.bsky.social
@leahbauerwrites.bsky.social
Lady of Books and Trees, writer and reader, friendly neighborhood bi, she/her. 🌈
Ooh, which ones are those? I see there’s a second book after Swordheart but it’s not out until 2026?
November 13, 2025 at 4:01 AM
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November 13, 2025 at 2:45 AM
What an opening simile 😆
November 7, 2025 at 8:05 PM
How's this?

ANASTASIA x RUNNING CLOSE TO THE WIND

After a costly mistake, 24yo thief Ness faces exile from her gang unless she can steal a prince, get him to his rich aunt, and keep her pretty nemesis from interfering. Falling for both of them wasn't planned.

#MockPit #FiFRevPit #A #F #R #LGBT
November 7, 2025 at 7:52 PM
Maybe you could try something like "When a traumatized intern accidentally strands..."?
November 7, 2025 at 7:34 PM
The MC is the leader of her crew, and two years ago, she made a mistake that almost cost the gang one of their jobs. She's been trying to earn back the trust of the leader of the gang who's threatening to kick her whole crew out of the gang if they don't complete this next job (stealing the prince).
November 7, 2025 at 7:32 PM
It's a gang of criminals. Do you think that needs to be made clearer?
November 7, 2025 at 7:15 PM
Oooh, I'm intrigued by the magic cosemtics and to find out why he hates the MC!
November 7, 2025 at 6:57 PM
It is definitely tricky. How will using her mind magic or him discovering she has it jeopardize the trust of the man she loves? Is there a chance Vreta might make things worse while trying to free his sister?
November 7, 2025 at 6:49 PM
Love the sound of this!
November 7, 2025 at 6:34 PM
Why is the evil one going after Kat specifically? Also is she someone with multiple lives? The last line makes it sound like this might be the case.
November 7, 2025 at 6:30 PM
I think adding that she is the love interest's sister would be a good way to show more of her motivations.
November 7, 2025 at 6:28 PM
This is a good start! I think the name of the cockatoo might be unnecessary for the pitch. I think it would be better to establish that Lumi is the wild girl. Is this a dual POV story? If not, I would also recommend putting Bugsy's name first in the second sentence to clarify he's the MC.
November 7, 2025 at 6:21 PM
Sounds good. I'm assuming something in the story tempts her to consider abandoning her "duty" to sacrifice herself, so if you can fit a hint to that in your reworked pitch, I think that might help with stakes.
November 7, 2025 at 6:16 PM
Does the intern intentionally strand the archeology team or is it an accident?
November 7, 2025 at 6:14 PM
Okay, maybe something like: "On a planet governed by oppression and censorship, two interplanetary librarians investigate the disappearance of the one government official sympathetic to reform..."
November 7, 2025 at 6:12 PM
This is definitely an intriguing pitch. I'm wondering if a little more specificity can really tie things together. Do Star Slayers kill stars and Star Wardens work to prevent them from doing so? Does the magic of their realms relate to stars?
November 7, 2025 at 6:07 PM
I think you have a good start with the pitch in the graphic. Perhaps you can give more details as to the stakes of what might happen if the powerful secret is revealed or how it will affect the MC?
November 7, 2025 at 6:03 PM