KarsynMacenna (They/Them)
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KarsynMacenna (They/Them)
@karsynmacenna.bsky.social
Fantasy reader/writer hoping to publish my first novel ✍️ 📖
The battle was already started, right above. You can see the end of scene two, where the battle itself starts. I separate each scene in my drafts. I'll try and adjust the wording. Thank you!
November 29, 2024 at 11:28 PM
I'm thinking either the color of the crystals or the number of them in a group would be the easiest way for players to know.
November 29, 2024 at 4:30 PM
I see, thank you! Unfortunately, the first person narration wouldn't work in the prologue, but I'll try and make the fight more distinct to help readers.
November 29, 2024 at 7:07 AM
The writing itself feels lacking in emotion. It provides the information needed for the scene but cuts out the meaning behind it. Almost rushed, it needs additional context and details to soften the information provided.
November 29, 2024 at 4:19 AM